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Finwen by Ann Chovi (commissioned art)

Finwen, a pleasant but somewhat awkward Altmer student at the College of Winterhold. He makes some appearances in The White Phial.

I commissioned Ann Chovi to draw Finwen a couple of years ago, and I still absolutely adore this. The style, the expression, the colors-- all perfect. Check out more of Ann Chovi's art on Tumblr and DeviantArt!
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[The following was originally posted to Tumblr on September 23, 2017. Note that I've revised the story since posting the commentary; for more information and a link to the original story, see Revising The White Phial.]

I posted the first chapter of The White Phial a year ago. Thought I’d mark the occasion by doing a bit of commentary on an older chapter.

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[The following was originally posted to Tumblr on March 18, 2017.]

Dug this up when I was hunting around for something else. I forgot how long ago I made a first stab at writing the scene where J'zargo sees his room at the College for the first time. This was back in August, and it’s pure dialogue. I’m not sure why I thought the College would give Rumarin a room too; as far as these mages are concerned, Rumarin’s a nobody.

Gotta love the Winterhold furnishings. Your room periodically resets too, so if you hide the skulls somewhere, they mysteriously find their way back home.

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The first chapter of The White Phial went through a lot of drafts.

Originally Mehra was going to meet Rumarin the way you do in the Interesting NPCs mod, up in a pocket-sized Nord crypt called Yorgrim Overlook. The encounter is fun, but I struggled to translate it into a written scene I could be happy with. For one thing, I couldn’t convince myself that Mehra would have a good reason to seek out this little ruin.

Still, I kinda like the bit where Mehra is trying to decide whether it’s worth hauling a horned helmet back to Windhelm. She asks Rumarin how much he thinks the helm is worth:

Rumarin glanced at the helm again. “Oh, maybe fifty septims? The real question is, will it fit in your bag?”

“It won’t.” Mehra sighed and got to her feet. “So then the question becomes, is a loss of dignity worth fifty septims?” She pushed back her hood and placed the helm on her head.

“It’s crooked.” Rumarin adjusted the helm so that it sat level on her head. He took a step back, put a hand to his chin, and tried to look serious. “No, I’m afraid even I wouldn’t settle for fifty septims. An indignity of this sort demands at least seventy-five.”

Things improved when they stepped into Candlehearth Hall. The tavern setting had more to work with– Mehra reacting to a song about the Dragonborn, Rumarin snarking about Black-Briar mead, eavesdroppers, etc. Mehra was even going to do the fisticuffs thing with Rolff and trick him into falling down the stairs, but that whole exchange never felt right.

Rather than struggle on with the Yorgrim Overlook scene, I decided to have them meet in Candlehearth Hall instead. But there were new questions that needed answering: Why do they start talking to each other in the first place? Sure, it’s reasonable for them to meet in a tavern, and sure, they could start a conversation that leads to an adventure. But what’s driving it all? What’s the problem that needs solving, and why do they need each other to do it?

This led to Mehra wanting to recruit someone to help her find the White Phial, but later I switched it so Rumarin is the one who needs a partner. At first Rumarin needed the reward money because he was broke and Ulundil and Arivanya were about to kick him out of their one-room house. But Gary (my husband/beta reader) said that wasn’t enough; before he could feel invested in the character and believe in the urgency of the mission, Rumarin had to be up against something far worse.

So I looked into Rumarin’s dialogue again for other ideas. As it happens, he makes references to some shady stuff– smuggling, forgery, etc. Just enough to suggest a Han Solo situation where he has to pay off a big debt because he screwed up a smuggling job.

The catalyst for adding J'zargo to the mix was Stenvar, the mercenary guy at Candlehearth Hall. In a throwaway scene where Mehra was actively looking for a companion, Rumarin sorta, kinda tried to pass himself off as a mage (hey, look, a coin trick!). Stenvar eavesdropped, knew Rumarin by reputation, and told Mehra that this guy is a flimflam, oh by the way, you wanna hire somebody with real muscles? That was kinda fun, but it seemed like it would be even more fun if the scene had a character who takes magic seriously and thinks it’s just awful that this elf is passing himself off as a College mage. So J'zargo was brought on board and Stenvar became the unnamed Nord that Rumarin pesters at the start of the chapter.

Fortunately, none of the other chapters have needed quite this much wrangling…

[Originally posted on Tumblr on January 16, 2017]
tippetariuswrites: Mehra (my Breton Dragonborn from Skyrim) (Mehra)

Mehra has been giving me fits from the beginning. She’s an original character and Skyrim’s “Chosen One” to boot, so I kept fiddling with all these variables to avoid making her too much of anything. Not too weak, not too powerful, not too boring, not too angsty– not too Mary Sue, dang it. Mr. Tippetarius said I should stop worrying so much and just let her grow naturally through the course of the story. And really, that’s the point: Mehra has a lot of growing to do before she’s ready to take on Skyrim’s problems.

I decided Mehra could either be a decent fighter or a decent magic user, but not both. So out the magic went. Magic is powerful in the Elder Scrolls universe, and it’s harder to build suspense into a story if magic can solve a lot of problems. But mostly I stripped out Mehra’s magic to give her a complex, force her to find other ways to deal with obstacles, and drive her relationships with magic-using characters in (hopefully) interesting directions.

Mehra was either going to be a Breton or an Altmer for one reason: both races are known for their magical abilities, which suggests it’s a big deal if you’re one of those people and can’t cast spells. That’s bound to feed some insecurities and lead to questions about what you’re good for. Rumarin is already an Altmer who struggles with learning magic, so I went with a Breton for contrast. Plus it amuses me to imagine all these Nords being scandalized when their long-awaited hero turns out to be a little Breton or a Bosmer. To quote How to Train Your Dragon, “I ordered an extra-large boy with beefy arms, extra guts and glory on the side. This here, this is a talking fish bone!”

Even with all that baggage, I didn’t plan on Mehra being as diffident as she is. When I started writing her in throwaway scenes, she was stronger, more experienced, more sure of herself. Something felt off. Almost like I’d forced these qualities onto her because she’s “supposed” to be strong enough to take the lead and accept the mantle of the Dragonborn. But Mehra wants nothing to do with this hero business– it was all an insane twist of fate. I didn’t start feeling invested in her until I let her be vulnerable.

[Originally posted on Tumblr on October 31, 2016]
 

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[The following was originally posted to Tumblr on May 29, 2017.]

I’m about to upload a new version of The White Phial’s first chapter to AO3, which was long overdue for major editing. Mehra was in flux when I first started writing the story, and she quickly morphed into something very different from what I first imagined. The longer the story went on, the more out-of-character Mehra felt in the opening scene. So I finally made some changes and asked Gary to beta-read the chapter again. Unfortunately it meant throwing out some fun lines that I still like, but it was necessary to keep things feeling consistent.

Probably the other biggest change is that Rumarin is no longer interested in studying Mehra’s map of Skyrim. At this stage, Rumarin doesn’t particularly care who these people are or where they came from. He’s mostly focused what they can do for him right now. (Also, last year I decided Mehra and J’zargo never actually went to Ivarstead/High Hrothgar.)

In case people prefer the old first chapter or just want to compare, I’m posting the (mostly) original version here.

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tippetariuswrites: Rumarin (follower from 3DNPCs Skyrim mod) (Rumarin)
Although The White Phial is becoming a story about three characters and how they evolve over the course of events, Rumarin was the reason I started writing it.

Rumarin is one of many characters from Interesting NPCs, a Skyrim mod I can't do without now. He's an Altmer who introduces himself as a "professional adventurer, bladebinder, and grave robber," and he’s also a former jester who has plenty of amusing things to say. (For more official descriptions, see the Interesting NPCs pages Rumarin and Character Profile - Rumarin.)

I had some challenges trying to get Rumarin to “feel right” for the story, though.

First challenge: I struggled to get a handle on Rumarin's personality because there are different ways to interpret the kind of person he is. He puts himself down a lot and calls himself half a halfwit, but is he? He hates studying (at least if it involves spell tomes), so we can make a case for that. But I don't go along with it. He notices things that aren't quite right (like Tolfdir's decision to make a bunch of new apprentices split up and explore what turns out to be a dangerous crypt), he throws around words like "alliteration" and "insufferable," he grew up around actors, and he once made it his business to play the fool.

Other interpretations: he's insecure and has a warped sense of self that doesn't match reality. Or he puts himself down so people won't expect much from him, or so they'll trust him more, or so they won't punch him too hard if he gets too snarky. Or he picked up the habit of self-deprecation when he was still a jester. Or any combination of these, really.

(Apparently I’m not the only one who struggled with getting into Rumarin’s head--there are some interesting comments about that in TrueNorth’s Heroes, Unlikely and Otherwise.)

Second challenge: Rumarin is a passive follower who's more than happy to let the Dragonborn lead the way and do the thinking. But followers pretty much have to be passive because they're not the ones playing the game; of course the Big Damn Hero of Skyrim calls the shots. This works in the game, but I couldn't make it fly in a multi-chapter story. Rumarin needed motivation to be more dynamic and make his own choices, so I saddled him with debt and set things up such that if he doesn't pay it off soon, Bad Things will happen to him. Also, he doesn't have a powerful leader-type he can depend on.

Third challenge: Rumarin is secretive. He won't tell you his views on politics or religion even if you're married to him. Almost everything he says is amusing, but after a while it feels like he's using humor to hide his true self and keep your character at arm's length. But maybe that’s worth exploring in a story: why does he feel the need to do this? Is he really trying that hard to avoid all the unpleasant things in life (in which case being an adventurer is a terrible way to go about it)? Can this change?

Fourth challenge (more like a point of interest): what should we make of all the stray comments that suggest Rumarin has been involved in some pretty questionable stuff? He knows a guy who makes counterfeit swords and College robes, he had dealings with a forger, he hopes he doesn't run into anybody he knows in a smuggling cave, he sometimes carries around an empty skooma bottle... yes, he could be joking around, but I think it's more interesting if there's something to it.

After all that, I think I ended up with a Rumarin who's a little more shady and much more of a go-getter than the Rumarin you meet in the game. But hopefully he still feels like Rumarin.

Addendum 10 Feb 2017: Everything I said about Rumarin being an entertainer/former jester? Rumarin tells you this stuff, but not everyone thinks he’s being truthful about his background. How deep the lies and half-truths go is wide open to speculation.

[Originally posted on Tumblr on October 7, 2016; edited with an addendum on February 10, 2017]
tippetariuswrites: J'zargo (follower from Skyrim) (J'zargo)
I started writing scenes with just Mehra and Rumarin, but early on I realized I needed a third character to round things out. I thought it would be fun to have a spellcaster who would take offense at Rumarin’s fake College robes and bring out the magic-based insecurities of the other two characters. J'zargo fit the bill perfectly: he’s proud of his school, takes magic seriously, and brags about how he’s going to be a great mage someday.

Unfortunately, J’zargo is already a student at the College of Winterhold when you start the game. That wasn’t going to work for my purposes. What the heck, I’ll just pretend I installed a mod that placed him in Helgen at the right moment. Let’s call it Live Another Life for J'zargo.

But then fanfic J'zargo started splintering away from the original J'zargo in other ways. There are still similarities: both J'zargos are boastful and have that “I’m going to be a hotshot mage” swagger. Both J'zargos are ambitious and know they have a lot to prove to people who neither like nor trust Khajiit. But fanfic J'zargo started picking up other traits that surprised me a bit. He’s loyal to his friend. He hates screwing up and letting people down. He’s straightforward about what he’s feeling; if he’s mad at you, you’ll know it.

That’s where the two J'zargos are very different. In-game J'zargo is a scheming fellow who’s out for himself. He’s eager to climb the ladder of success even if it means stepping on his rivals. He does something pretty nasty that you can attribute to either treachery or a criminal level of incompetence. The more I wrote, the more I realized I couldn’t see fanfic J'zargo being underhanded like that– he has a different core.

But I like this J'zargo too much to rewrite him. Now the only way I can reconcile the differences is by assuming my J'zargo hasn’t had the same experiences as his counterpart. He hasn’t even been to the College yet, so maybe he hasn’t encountered the obstacles and disappointments destined to change him. Perhaps the devious J'zargo is what he becomes if his dreams tempt him down the wrong path.

[Originally posted on Tumblr on October 22, 2016]

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